The alarm buzzes with alacrity
there’s no time for lethargy
The cuppa brews slowly,
the brain rattles loudly
Did I turn on the geyser?
Oops, don’t let the milk boil over
Morning noises; honking school buses
bustling with energy
heralding new synergy
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Nice read...:)
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it, A Wrter :-)
DeleteLuv your poems, Uma
ReplyDeletethanks, ma! :-)
DeleteUma dear,,, lovely... when u put in thru this beautiful verse.. it actually reflects many of our mom's daily chores .. and your poem brings a smile " ah all same everywhere dear moms"
ReplyDeleteRohini, glad it brought a smile to your face..isn't it the reality for us too? of course, we are moms too :-)))
DeleteWhat a wonderful description of morning sounds! Personally, I need to wake up gently, no loud annoying alarm to put me in a bad mood. Things must be quiet and subdued for me in the mornings... Well done!
ReplyDeleteGod bless you,
Cheryl
I like quiet mornings too, Cheryl..unfortunately the weekdays always start with a rush..
Deletethanks for reading and commenting :-)
Dear Uma,
ReplyDeleteThis is something most of us in urban cities can connect to. I specially liked the last two phrases, they put energy and sunshine in your poem. Well done :)
yep, the bane of urban life you can say but then that's what also defines it. Thanks, Soumyaa :-)
DeleteCool piece of poetry, I must say :) Refreshed my day!
ReplyDeletethanks a lot, Keirthana..I'm glad it refreshed your day :-)
Deleteoh yes and so the day begins .. and so does the week :)
ReplyDeletesame experience in my house every day ...
Bikram
yes, I guess its the same story everywhere, Bikram :-)
DeleteHa ha, ghar ghar ki kahani! Good one!
ReplyDeletehehe, yes, thanks, Vibha :-)
DeleteRise & Shine! You nailed it. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks you, Susan! :-)
DeleteVery nice! All the morning noises, it's a wonderful take on the prompt, I love it!
ReplyDeletethanks a lot, jetgirl. Glad you liked it. For some reason I'm unable to comment on yours. I loved yours too!
DeleteThe cacophony is the truth of urban lives, isn't it? Thanks a lot Jo-Anne and welcome here :-)
ReplyDeleteVery nicely written, Uma :-) I haven't visited your space much for poetry but do keep them coming!
ReplyDeletethanks a lot, Divya..do keep coming to read, Divya. Hopefully I'll keep you entertained :-)
DeleteI can hear that coffee brewing--I don't get out of bed until I do! :) Great added layers of sound with the rhyme scheme.
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately I do have to get up to get my brew :-( Thanks, Jennifer :-))
Deletewell said. beautifully composed poem. kudos.
ReplyDeletethanks a lot, Senthil. Good to see you here. How have you been?
DeleteVery hectic morning!
ReplyDeleteyes, hectic is the word!
DeleteI love how all the sounds helped me to picture a hectic morning. As long as I can have my coffee, I'm good to go most mornings.
ReplyDeleteYes, true that, Marcy!
Delete'heralding new synergy'
ReplyDeletelove that phrase! sounds like my mornings except minus the synergy.. =)
thanks a lot..haha, well, we might not realize the synergy but that's what keeps us going I think! :-)
DeleteYour word choices and structuring of this accomplishes a feeling of harried noise so perfectly.
ReplyDeletethank you so much for the kind words. Glad it came across that way!
DeleteGreat rhythm to this!!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you feel that way, Genna..thanks for appreciating!
DeleteI just lived all that today morning!
ReplyDeleteAh, Red, I live all of this every single morning!
DeleteGreat poem to read with morning coffee!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you liked it, thank you, Kymm! :-)
DeleteSigh, the sounds of every household :) Well done, Uma! And your first time at this too!
ReplyDeletethank you, Shailaja..and thanks for directing me towards these wonderful prompts. Needed it badly to get rid of my writer's block :-)
DeleteMakes me want to go make my coffee, now. :) Very nice!
ReplyDeletehehe, thanks, Jennifer :-)
DeleteThis work has a great rhythm. What is a geyser that would be boiling milk?
ReplyDeleteThey are independent lines, James; an emphasis on the chores that need to be ticked off. Thanks for appreciating :-)
DeleteVery nice. Good imagery. I can hear the sounds and it managed to invoke my morning today actually.
ReplyDeletethanks a lot, Laith. I'm glad you could imagine the sounds :-)
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