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The breaths were getting shorter.. The air engulfed me in a strangle knot. I struggled to keep my eyes open..

I heard him in my almost comatose mind..”Don’t go..I’m here..”

“Sigh! The moment I longed for... came just when I was leaving…”

There’s a loud noise. My eyes open suddenly..

 I was still there.. Alone.


My take for the 55 word fiction theme 'just when I was leaving...' for marathon bloggers. This is a week long attempt at 55-ers.
 #marathonbloggers #55wordfiction


  1. i love how inspite of being so short, one never knows how it will end! :)

    1. It's fun to write short ones too, right?

  2. Seconding Abha. It is always the end that gets to you.

  3. this 55ers r fun, specially the end line :)

  4. Replies
    1. close.. but which situation was more pleasant?

  5. its funny that we are all able to say so much in just 55 words that sometimes long ranty posts dont achieve :)

    1. so true, Monika..thanks for starting this :-)

  6. Good one. it is so much fun to convey something in only 55 words :)

    1. The word limit is the challenge and also the fun part..thanks, Jas :-)

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    1. thanks, Shubha..glad you liked it :-)

  8. Wow, suspense in 55 words is tough! Good one!


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