Skip to main content


The breaths were getting shorter.. The air engulfed me in a strangle knot. I struggled to keep my eyes open..

I heard him in my almost comatose mind..”Don’t go..I’m here..”

“Sigh! The moment I longed for... came just when I was leaving…”

There’s a loud noise. My eyes open suddenly..

 I was still there.. Alone.


My take for the 55 word fiction theme 'just when I was leaving...' for marathon bloggers. This is a week long attempt at 55-ers.
 #marathonbloggers #55wordfiction


  1. i love how inspite of being so short, one never knows how it will end! :)

    1. It's fun to write short ones too, right?

  2. Seconding Abha. It is always the end that gets to you.

  3. this 55ers r fun, specially the end line :)

  4. Replies
    1. close.. but which situation was more pleasant?

  5. its funny that we are all able to say so much in just 55 words that sometimes long ranty posts dont achieve :)

    1. so true, Monika..thanks for starting this :-)

  6. Good one. it is so much fun to convey something in only 55 words :)

    1. The word limit is the challenge and also the fun part..thanks, Jas :-)

  7. Replies
    1. thanks, Shubha..glad you liked it :-)

  8. Wow, suspense in 55 words is tough! Good one!


Post a Comment

Would love to hear from you :-)
Also, please click the subscribe by Email link below the comment form to get follow-up comments to your inbox..

Popular posts from this blog

An irrational dream

Pazhaniraja Elangovan trudged his way up the small slope on his rusty bicycle, a hand-me-down from one of his rare kind-hearted clients. A package, a heavy brown carton lay tied to the backseat with several ropes. The chains creaked as he pedaled harder on the slope.

Sweat trickled down his shiny brown face. Tiny buds of fresh acne dotted his forehead and chin area that was also beginning to sprout hair.

"Pazhani, don't keep loitering out in the hot sun," his Amma often chided him gently.

Pazhaniraja would dismiss his Amma's plea with silence.

She had suffered enough bringing him up single-handedly but was still worldly naive. What did she know about managing a part-time job as a local delivery boy, a night school, and a full-time dream? thought Pazhani irritatedly but also controlled his tongue.

His dream. Yes, he dreamed of owning his own business someday and making lots of money. He had many ideas but needed time to work on them.

Today, he thought excitedly. Wedn…

Bhutan: The last leg of our journey at Paro and a round up

Did you read the last post about how we made it to the top of the Takstang Monastery? If not, please do go back and read it.
Before I continue, here's a check-list that will come in handy for travelers.
Things to keep in mind while visiting the Taktsang or the Tiger's Nest Monastery 
1. You are supposed to be fully clothed while visiting this one or any other monastery/temple or Dzong in Bhutan. Which means you cannot wear short skirts, shorts, capris or the likes. Even your hands must be covered, so choose a full or three-fourth sleeved suit, top or shirt. Alternatively, you can wear a jacket or shrug.
2. Use of photography/video is prohibited in the inner sanctum of all temples and monasteries. At the Tiger's Nest, you have to surrender your backpacks with mobiles outside with the security. There are no lockers but like I said earlier, it's absolutely safe even without the lockers.
3. Wear a good quality and comfortable pair of sports shoes if you're trekking to …

A new haven

"Papa!" squealed the little one, jumping up and down, jabbing his little hand towards the aqua blue clear water.

The father, a few meters behind, smiled wearily. His steps were slow and heavy from plodding through the ankle length snow. He caught up breathlessly alongside his son who was now beside himself with all the excitement of discovering something extraordinarily beautiful.

Despite the fatigue of setting out on a week-long expedition with the 5-year-old, the magnificent sight of the snow-clad slopes all around encasing a glistening water body right in between made the adult smile.

The chill at dawn break was prominent and in spite of being covered in thick black overcoats, they two expeditors shivered slightly.

Releasing the child from a bear hug, the father looked deep into those twinkling pair that shone with pride, happiness, and fascination.

"Papa, this place looks great. Can we move in here?" the voice was thick with hope and expectation.