Longing..




The breaths were getting shorter.. The air engulfed me in a strangle knot. I struggled to keep my eyes open..


I heard him in my almost comatose mind..”Don’t go..I’m here..”


“Sigh! The moment I longed for... came just when I was leaving…”


There’s a loud noise. My eyes open suddenly..


 I was still there.. Alone.

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My take for the 55 word fiction theme 'just when I was leaving...' for marathon bloggers. This is a week long attempt at 55-ers.
 #marathonbloggers #55wordfiction

18 comments:

  1. i love how inspite of being so short, one never knows how it will end! :)

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  2. Seconding Abha. It is always the end that gets to you.

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  3. this 55ers r fun, specially the end line :)

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    1. close.. but which situation was more pleasant?

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  5. its funny that we are all able to say so much in just 55 words that sometimes long ranty posts dont achieve :)

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    1. so true, Monika..thanks for starting this :-)

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  6. Good one. it is so much fun to convey something in only 55 words :)

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    1. The word limit is the challenge and also the fun part..thanks, Jas :-)

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  7. Wow, suspense in 55 words is tough! Good one!

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