The moon sauntered in and out from the dark clouds, throwing
a luminous but eerie glow over the ruins
where Jack, sick from fighting the seas, sat on an elevated stone.
The violent storm had
turned the sea into a ferocious animal that howled for days together, finally
devouring the entire ship and the inmates, save Jack, the ruthless pirate.
Jack wondered a way to get out of the place when a cloaked
man appeared from nowhere. The black-robed apparition looked into Jack’s eyes
and whispered, “Welcome home”
Jack panicked to realize that his journey had ended at the netherworld.
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| Image courtesy of the British Library from Roving Jack the Pirate Hunter, published 1867, a romance
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Word count:100
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Linking this up to the 100 word story for the photo prompt at the Light and Shade challenge
and Five sentence fiction at Lillie McFerrin Writes for the word prompt: Luminous
I really enjoyed reading your entry. I especially like the way you build up a sense of fear and darkness. You bring the picture to life in amazing detail. I like the unexpected final line as well.
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DeleteA great atmosphere in this one Uma,
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Ally :)
Thank you so much, Ally :-)
DeleteAhh this was interesting and clever too...very well written
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Glad you liked it, Naba! :-)
DeleteVery cleverly done. Loved it.
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DeleteGood one and very well narrated :)
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DeleteVery nice build up there, Uma! Loved the last line. Powerful and full of impact :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Shailaja, so glad you liked it :-)
DeleteIt's wonderful :-) Cheers
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DeleteGoodness, the worst thing about FSF? You really want there to be way more than five sentences!! Love the shock at the end.
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DeleteBeautifully penned! Loved the thrill!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you liked it, Shalini! :-)
DeleteGood one.. Well written!!
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DeleteSuch vivid imagery...great story!
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DeleteLoved the story line, Uma
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Great imagination!
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