Spellbound




He clamped a sweaty palm over his sister's quivering lips. The yellow light flickered perilously as the coin dragged her finger over letters, one after another. The candle collapsed into a blob of melted wax as a voice sniggered, "Welcome."


 

18 comments:

  1. Chilling. I hope the duo made it out alive and didn't collapse like the melted candle.

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  2. I loved the imagery of the candle collapsing under the weight of hot was. I got a bit turned around here: perilously as the coin dragged her finger over letters, one after another <-- it reads as if an actual coin has fingers.

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    1. I meant for the coin to have the power to move the finger, but I totally get your point. Thanks for pointing it out.

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    2. Thanks for reading and commenting :)

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    3. The image with the coin confused me, too. Thanks for clarifying.

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  3. Oh! How exciting. You've set the mood beautifully by using siblings as your characters, and the tight pacing kept the tension throughout.

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    1. Thank you, Asha. Glad to see your comment :)

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  4. Hi Uma! I have just discovered your blog. And I am already enjoying these posts. Thank you! :)

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    1. Hey Deepika, welcome! Always glad to have a reader. Thanks for the warm words and hope to see you around :)

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  5. Always look forward to reading about sibling adventures!

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    1. I like sibling adventures too. Thank you, Anusha for reading :)

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  6. I liked this take on the prompt. I don't know why, but the word "blob" redirected the feeling of this from sinister to not-so-sinister, somehow? I liked it still, though. :)

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    1. Ah, you think 'blob' sort of gave it a humorous touch? Thank you, Lisa, for reading :)

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  7. How delightfully dark this is. I think having siblings helped tell this story so well.

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  8. Ooooo, that was so delightfully creepy!

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