His smile
Adds to warm hearth
Her frown
Reminder; a promise forgotten!
Their love but
Evens out the odds
Some dull grays,
Plus bright rays
Equals a colourful rainbow
Credit the gain
Debit the pain
In life eventually
The accounts will tally_________________
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Love it Uma!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Megs :-)
Delete:) beautiful .. and yes god willing it will all tally in the end for sure
ReplyDeleteBikram
Thanks, Bikram..yes, I believe so! :-)
DeleteIt was like climbing the rungs of a ladder. Living, is rising, if we live the right way
ReplyDeleteDefinitely, Habiba. It's up to us to rise and make this life worthy of living. Thanks for being here :-)
DeleteOh, I hope you are right! Beautiful writing.
ReplyDeleteOh, yes, I believe this, QOTD and thanks so much :-)
DeleteLoved them especially the last one :)
ReplyDeletethank you, Keirthana :-)
DeleteSo clever how you crafted a check/balance system into the prompt. My favourite lines were the paragraph
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad you liked this, Glasgow! thanks :-)
DeleteAnd I thought I was the only one who was always tallying up actions and words more than currency. Love this piece, Uma!
ReplyDeleteIt's great that you tally actions, Yeshu. I'm sure they must give you more satisfaction than just tallying superficial numericals. And, thanks for the appreciation :-)
DeleteAlways tally it up on the positive side! Nicely calculated!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Kymm :-)
DeleteLove these lines especially: "Their love but/Evens out the odds."
ReplyDeleteI'm glad these touched you, Jennifer..thanks :-)
DeleteI love that last paragraph especially. What a perfect balancing act.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Jen :-)
DeleteI liked your use of all the math-related language and how it all came together in the end.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad the math brought about the right effect, Marcy..thanks a lot :-)
DeleteAmazing last stanza!!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Genna! :-)
Deleteyes...it is truly the beauty of a relationship..the rosy as well as the thorny part.
ReplyDeleteYes, if there are roses, there has to be thorns too!
DeleteBeautifully written...hopefully like with life, it will all tally up in the end... :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sanch and I hope too :-)
DeleteSuch lovely poetry! I loved the second stanza, Uma. You have a way with words :)
ReplyDeleteyou are kind in your praise, Aathira but thanks :-)
DeleteVery sweet to read. It all comes out in the wash, right?
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot :-)
DeleteYes, it does all even out in the end. Well put.
ReplyDeletethanks a lot, James!
DeleteI especially like this: Evens out the odds
ReplyDeleteNice play on words!
I'm glad you liked it. Much appreciated :-)
DeleteTHis is beautiful! I love the last line, 'the accounts will tally'. Such a normal statement for an extraordinary process. Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, Shailaja :-)
DeleteBeautiful!
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